How can I get better my gig?

[arigatoespacial]

Hi everyone, I’m interested in becoming a fiverr seller, but I don’t know how is my gig for other people, what I mean, when we get used to something we don’t see mistakes that other people easely see. So tell me, how does it look? Is there something you suggest to change? What is your first impression?
https://es.fiverr.com/share/P4aX2A