I would definitely fix the description: some sentences are hard to understand and the formatting (especially the lists) is confusing. Also, you should probably end the description with some "call to action" phrase.
Many customers don't take the time to write a review (70% of my completed orders have no reviews) but the more you work and the more quality you put in your work, the more reviews you'll get.
Just keep up the good work and good luck 💪